Well I do like the way you're going about this series. However, you're spelling and grammar need to be checked, so I'd suggest finding a beta or using spell check. Also, you're characterisation of Gwen is ok, but Jack's American and you have him sounding like Gwen, it really throws me off. Jack and Gwen are also more articulate then you have them. Other than that I love the series.
Author's Response: sorry my mids a bit of a haze atm have exams will sort it out soon promise - in the mean time look at my tenth doctor stuff